Really an awesome fic. I know I'm echoing the masses when I say the Atlantis POV really worked here, but it bears repeating. I liked too that Atlantis wasn't just enamored with John, but both of them, and that the city felt almost responsible for the two of them. The city worked for me as a character and it doesn't always do that in fics.

Nice job. I only had one place where I got thrown out of the story, and that was the paragraph that begins: "When Rodney rocks his head back to open his throat and takes John in ...". I don't mind a run-on sentence in a sex scene and I don't mind fragments and such either when used stylistically. What threw me was that this whole paragraph starts with "when" making it one big long dependent clause. I kept waiting for something to balance it--"when" this happens, then this--but because of all the conjunctions nothing came. If that's not clear, I can explain what I mean.

Thanks again for a great story.